All Comments on 'Aimee: Goth to Gor'

LORD MASTER SCRIBE

LORD - hardly even peripherally aware of the niceties of the English language ;lik proper word usage, grammar , and spelling.

MASTER - Not certainly of communication as evidenced by poorly expressed passages and cryptic descriptions.

SCRIBE (Informal term for journalist) Someone who has a facility for the written word and a facile employment of it. Hardly evident here.

vision (-of) worthy of any

absent mindedly (absentmindedly)

pulling then taut (them)

icing on the cakes (cake)

water was away (wash)

shallow (sallow)

out of the way (out-of-the-way)

who reflected (-so seemed to reflect) (MASTERFUL COMMUNICATION!!!! CLEAR AS MUD!!!!)

slipped passed her lips (past)

mad her cum (made)

Crystals (Crystal’s)

out side (outside)

boy friend (boyfriend)

flood gates (floodgates)

take her mind from her (VERY POORLY EXPRESSED!!!!)

whatever avenues she choose, or what ever venues (THE SAME WORD 4 WORDS APART SPELLED DIFFERENTLY!!!!) (GOOD FOCUS ON DETAIL!!!!)

Editor in Chief (editor in chief)

every time (everytime)

life style (lifestyle)

oceans waves (ocean’s)

tongued welcomed (tongue)

god (God)

her self (herself)

over take (overtake)

nights events (night’s)

re-doing (redoing)

strangers hand (stranger’s)

re-reads (reread)

caught (-of) herself

and (a) smile played

taken a back (aback)