All Comments on 'Archipelago Pt. 02'

..".it always hurt when a man forced his way in without preparing the way,...." That isn't consistent with the first chapter, where males are subordinate to females in Ghent's society.

Decently written, but needs work on continuity.

Please acquaint yourself with the very basics of writing: what is a sentence and when to use commas and periods. There are an awful lot of run-on sentences held together with an overuse of commas. It's a decent story that could be going somewhere, but the basics very much need to be tended to.