by Will_and_Bijou
sex scenes are difficult to get right, I think, because they often sound too over the top. This one gets it just right and it's because of authenticity. The characters are believable--moreso here than in the first story--and they're very human. All the human foibles are in place and simply shown without any informational blah blah that strays writing away from narrative and into explanation. Nice work. Great real characters. Keep going! :-)