by kaylee_2000
You have the makings of a good story, but cut it off too quickly. I would also suggest going into more details.
Potential, but over way too quickly.
Wow great story. Can not wait for the next parts.
Very nice story, cannot wait for the next ones
Hopefully more about what happens to you ;)
Good start, but it ends too abruptly. Looking forward to more chapters.
Great start! Can't wait to read the rest!
Loving your work...
Please keep going.
Very hot!!!