All Comments on 'Big City Bondage (M/F) Ch. 01'

Loved the story! There’s so much potential here. It is a bit rushed, so perhaps take a deep breath and pace through the action bit by bit. Try and describe things a bit more, particularly the erotic side of things, what were each of them thinking and feeling, how did she look ? I loved the sense of humour that came with the story, it’s a great way of adding realism and humanising the characters. It’s great that you used the Tags too.

Thanks for plucking up the courage to submit your story, hopefully this is just the first of, and of course thanks for sharing.

Tess (uk)

Thank you Tess for posting positive constructive criticism. I really do appreciate it as I work to improve my writing. Glad you loved the story. I submitted a part 2 so it will be posting shortly. I hope you can provide feedback on that too.