All Comments on 'Brandi Ch. 01-02'

Interesting start, but way too fucking short. You want this story to succeed make each chapter longer, at least two pages.

Other than that the writing was smooth and the story flowed fluidly, no hitches.

The editing was good.

However you get 3/5. The way too short.

Interesting start. Some Tags for the story would be appreciated as well as being helpful.

Tess (uk)