by rampe
It really shows English is not your native language, makes it hard to read. You may have a word that is spelled correctly but it is not the correct word for what you are trying express.
That is one of the problem I think. But I am getting bored to editors who promise to help but has no time or willing to actually do it.
There still is people who like my stories. So I have kept writing because I think that the text can not be unreadable because of that.
You have a good story started, you should continue the story.
Veronica
I thought that was an especially fun read. He is such a lucky guy to be her bitch.