All Comments on 'Burying the Hatchet - Pt. 01'

Interesting story. I will say that the tags are most definitely misleading at best as nothing really happened. Depending on how the second part goes it will determine if it holds up. Looking forward to the next part.

I hope more gets added to this soon, it's an amazing opening

Interesting start

Waste of space on an EROTIC story site

Giving it a 3. It has a very compelling premise, but quite short and nothing erotic so far. But I see the potential for an extremely interesting story.

I hope that Melissa decides to drag out their downfall. It's one thing to just make them into instant slaves completely obedient to every command. It's obviously possible to just make them instant dedicated sycophants and publicly humiliate and shred any semblance of social dignity they have.

But it would be more entertaining to have her allow them to continue their public lives without any seeming difference to most. Just some orders to never attempt to tell anyone about what happened or to do anything that might risk getting out from under her control. Then maybe a set of daily rules - just something to make continuing their normal public lives without massive humiliation ... interesting. She can play around with the rules - remove some for good behavior, add more on for unsatisfactory service, or just at whim for the fun of it. Add in some periodic visits for personal amusement, "training", and punishment. Maybe some photo/video shoots for some blackmail material - should the magic ever wear off. Would be a lot more fun to watch them struggle to maintain their dignity as it's slowly, little by little, stripped from them.

Just my thoughts. But either way, looking forward to reading more.

Gave it a 1 it supposed to be revenge yet the Melissa already has control. Boo, at least let the other girls have some fun first but no the alpha bitch is already ahead. Don't think I'll be returning