All Comments on 'Business Transaction'

A waste of time to read this scene. Too many requests for participation, which should have been done prior to the scene starting, to establish limits

This seemed like an opening paragraph.

You write well. Your story has a detached harshness that I found refreshing. Sometimes business is just business. Nice work.

I liked the story, it caught my attention. I liked how it stayed a business transaction all the way through. Often it seems that a story that starts this way would have a second chapter where they fall madly in love or lust or something. I liked this story because it did something I wasn't expecting.

Thank you for taking the time to write it,