All Comments on 'Business Transaction'

I liked the story, it caught my attention. I liked how it stayed a business transaction all the way through. Often it seems that a story that starts this way would have a second chapter where they fall madly in love or lust or something. I liked this story because it did something I wasn't expecting.

Thank you for taking the time to write it,

You write well. Your story has a detached harshness that I found refreshing. Sometimes business is just business. Nice work.

This seemed like an opening paragraph.

A waste of time to read this scene. Too many requests for participation, which should have been done prior to the scene starting, to establish limits