All Comments on 'Calista's Dungeon Ch. 13'

Sorry this didn't post with my user name. I am a twit...

Holy cow, this was amazing. The idea of the alligator clips and the whip was so hot. And the details made it come alive. I can all but see Callista sipping her wine with poor Sarah hanging there. And the emotion between them seems very real. Great job.

The only con crit I have for you is to decide on one verb tense for the whole thing. The switch between present and past is jarring. I'm off to read more, but I thought I should tell you I am more than willing to read over anything you have to check the grammar and spelling... if you're interested.