All Comments on 'CFNM Beginings'

Naming a character by a single letter is jarring and detracts from the story. The writing is also very bland, no description of the characters for example.

I liked the story. The descriptions of the characters may be left to the reader's imagination, but the situation and the MC's feelings really come through. The story has a simple, realistic tone that makes it quite compelling.

One suggestion: put direct speech in quotation marks: She whispered to me, "It's payback time."

Good start.

Sorry, but this was uninspiring.

The basis of something special. Intrigue, mystery, promise, games to cum. Enjoy writing and developing this story. I look forward to the humiliation and fun.