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“ "I have a gun you pervert," Katie projected in a brave voice in case a customer had discovered where she lived…

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'Street Whore'? I'm a barista!”

😆 love it

Needs a little more buildup as to who she is/was and what kind of life she has before the game starts. The end of this page/chapter is way too soon and with not nearly enough information even about the game she finds herself suddenly inside. This idea has been done before so you will really need to step it up a notch in all areas to be interesting enough to hold our attention.