All Comments on 'Chamber Maid Pt. 02'

Your editing has improved, but still a few glitches. For people not familiar, you should spell out the celebrity in each chapter. Such as, "Alex (AJ) Mclean, her favorite of the Backstreet Boys..." Yes, you are writing for your own gratification, but it needs to be as if you're sitting around a table with your girlfriends, telling them the story. Picture the expression on their faces as you weave your tale

Angus