All Comments on 'Check-up'

"She states and directs you to lie down" Oops, somebody perhaps started to write this from the first person, sanity prevailed, and this sentence was forgotten in editing?

I want. Mmore

and directs you to lie down.

I snapped back out it in para 3 when you slipped from 1st to 2nd person narrative.

Apart from that a fine effort in the difficult 750 category. 5*

Ah damn it, I thought I thought I had fixed all the issues.