by inhalesdeeply
Brilliant story! Nice slow build up, developed characters and lots of action!
This was a hot story. Would have loved for them to stay longer and explored more, but it was a great opening.
Enjoyed the story and imagining it happening to me and my wife, but the misspelled words make it difficult to keep the flow smooth.
Very good, the ending happened too soon. Would like to see this all expanded.
This was a very good story that deserves at least one more installment. I wish that Carly and her husband had been my wife - who also had a teenage same sex experience - and me.
I noticed multiple spelling and grammatical errors in this story that, at least to me, proved a bit distracting. Perhaps I could should relax. Perhaps you should engage a proofreader.
I loved the story, very hot and steamy action. I hope more will come of more visits.