All Comments on 'Confession of a Lonely Mother Pt. 02'

The story started off well. Then halfway into the first part, it started drifting. It was totally lost in the second part.

This is okay for an audience that just wants titillations. But if you want to write a story, you still have some distance to go.

The English is decent though. Hope to see some better stuff soon.

I gave it a 3....sorry.

I couldn't get into it.

The story lost its track in 2nd part..may be fiza become ashus wife & sabina makes it threesome in next part.. May be some lesbian action Between sabina & fiza make it interesting.

lov this sstory. Iended up with my dingers in myself,

Brilliant!

The more you write the better you'll get. With dad's approval, now it's time for Ashu to really fuck Sabeena long and hard. With Sabeena getting vocal and swearing as Ashu fucks her to multiple orgasms before he comes hard in her pussy. "Oh Ashu, your cock is so big, fuck me harder baby, shoot all your cum deep inside my pussy!!"

that's better lots better mam son making love yes a 5 from me, write more lots more

JT

Great story Ashu. Your maa's dreams of having her sex starved & neglected Passion Pit given to you as a Gift of Deflowering you. She went to gracious steps to make this happen, with Fiza's help. She wanted your seed that night to flow into her. She has been waiting 3years for this to happen, for her and ONLY her to take your virginity. She needed a man just as much as you needed a woman and NOW you have EACH OTHER

I thought it was great, exciting, and very fun. What would happen if he got his mother pregnant, she is young enough yes?