All Comments on 'Dig Two Graves Ch. 05'

the only thing I missed or you did not explain was why Hinkley did what she did? A minor point but none the less a cracking tale.thanks....John

Ironic isnt it?

Usually those who defending the author's works against any reasonable criticism do so becuase they think the critics are either

1) TORCH the bitch or

2) dont like the story the author wrote.

in this case every single readers/ author who thinks this is a GREAT story never say...

" hey winter foxx I like way the Wife an assistant District Attorney tied up the the innocent husband then tortured him THEN cut off one his testicles and the husband never told anyone about it..."

LOL....

the readers who think this is a great story never say in theirr feedabck...

"Hey winterfoxx I love how the ADA siezed an innocent man's funds for her own perosnal wealth... and without any justification..."

LOL...

geee why is that?

yeah sounds realistic to me ...

the real question is why didnt he spit in her face

A real page turner!

I just reread this story, it's as good the second time around as it was the first.

I'm glad you had Jake begin to forgive her. I would hate to see Jake end up a bitter, nasty curmudgeon that sees no beauty anywhere because he hangs onto his pain and allows it to define the rest of his life.

Are you going to write any more?

All of the facts and information that the author has put into this story can only come from a lot to research or the author is very well read.

A very interesting story that keep the reader on the edge all of the time.

This is the second time I've read this story and both times I've been amazed as how the story brings you into it.

Well done and thanks for the story.

Using present tense in a story is good only for two things:

- providing director's notes in a script for a play or movie

- as a voice over narrative for a movie

Otherwise in a story, novel, it is irritating to the reader, it is also difficult to follow and just plain bad writing.

Great, great, great story. Thank'you winterfoxx. I really hope to read more from you.

It was a good read until the end...

The problem with the premise, and numerous plot holes have been documented well by others. The problems are obvious. Yet, I applaud the author for his first attempt and technical writing skills.

You can't keep your characters straight (Heide sub for Susie); you use too much Brit formality inappropriately. I second the criticism of use of present tense. Extremely annoying. I give you credit for the hubby having some use of the brain in his head as the story develops. "Ohgod" is two words and is over used.

Thought male was allowed to be intelligent, but author creates a semi-doofus; as so many LW authors do. Why did the guy not do what real people would do and get hold of a bunch of people about what's happening; especially with his supposed position and the people he must know. No call to his secretary to check? WTF? I'm getting more than annoyed.

As already mentioned, time with Heidi and Jenine had to be product of author's perverted mind. No good lawyer defending himself would allow such crap to occur, and it blows the quality of the story to hell. Also tired of left out works and run ons. And, for someone who has low alcohol tolerance, he sure guzzles the beer every chance he gets. Maybe just the author's alter-ego.

Still one of the best on the site.

After reading this entire story a second time, I have two comments: <br> <br> 1) You should be proud this story was so powerful over 100 readers were moved to comment. Good comments or bad, it shows you can get your readers emotionally involved. That is a tribute. <br> <br> 2) Most of the negative comments boil down to the reader would have taken the plot in a different directions. That is not a negative. For the few nasty comments, ignore them for what they are. <br> <br> It's been a half year now. When can we expect another of your fine stories?

you wrote: ......" Most of the negative comments boil down to the reader would have taken the plot in a different directions...."

No stupid..... pay attention

The negative reaction are from the readers smart enough to tell the difference between SHIT and Shinola.

This story is CRAP. The author wrote an impossible tail. Period.

As someone else said the wife ... an experienced PROSECUTER ... intentionally and KNOWINGLY engaged in CRIMINAL scheme where she assisted in the sexual torture and mutilation of her husband...

then she engages in massive scheme to get her Husband fired and does so even AFTER knowing that he was innocent

and when she is finally trapped and caught .... nothing happensto her. She gets away with it almost scott free.

In Fact the court orders the wife and husband into counseling ??!?!?

are you out of your fucking mind?

this woman is mentally ILL... violent and tortures innocent peoeple. She is a sociopath

counselling????

and readers think this is a GOOD story?

Let a revenge (at least in stories) be tooth for tooth, eye for eye... How does Mr Schmidt continue having two nuts when Jake almost lost one?

Also Please NEVER write stories in present tense. They suck...

Too much melodrama for a foregone conclusion and with little in terms of a payback to both the perpetrators of the crime....

WF,

This is a great story and great writing.

x

Still one of the best on the site!! It was realistic and captivating. It also seemed like a very well described plot of a very real situation. Keep up the good work!

Please write more,you have real talent, a little unbalanced on the revenge side, not enough, LOL, after what Jake had been thru, plus no apology from his mom, or his friend, Susie's lawyer.

Excellent story, hope you write more. Enjoyed your style, character developement, and story. Need more quality work like this one.

Wow. Super story. I loved it and hope you write many more.

Hooked on the first page and disappointed when it ended.

I have read this story twice and enjoyed it much more the first time as the story interest exceeded the faults. That being said, I do wish you would post more often as your story was well worth reading. Thanks.

That was a wonderful read, If you every want to write a sequel I would read it like it was the last harry potter

Just reread this brilliant short story while waiting for my delayed flight on thanksgiving eve. I almost missed my flight I was so engrossed in this masterpiece. Oh what joy! Thank you

get your head out of your ass. The Wife.. a district attorney-- sexually tortured then mutilated her INNOCENT husband then left him to die ( her own words).

and she got away with it.

I see that you haven't added anything since this story. Don't stop now. There must be another in you. This was terrific. Again... don't stop now.

This is so strange going from telling a story to directing a script.

"On our way back to the LBJ to pick up her car, we stopped first at a Starbucks and then somehow I agreed to drive up here to this rise. Now I'm looking over at Susie as she contently looks out the front windshield.

"I've always loved the view of the campus from up here," Susie finally says."

but then I'm a hopeless romantic.

On the other hand I would posit that someone with a LOT of discretionary funds could have someone killed - or at least severely maimed, confined to a wheelchair for life. OK, a romantic with a mean streak.

she does it all over again to the next guy that 'makes her feel special.'

Court ordered counseling after a lengthy jail term would be appropriate.

Though I like this kind of ending, just looking for one where the one cheated on goes off the deep end, and he/she's really smart and manages to just destroy the world of whoever cheated on them

Still one of the very best. 5 stars is not enough

Heard you 3 times already. So please fuck off. Author, thank you, tough but enjoyable read.

Once again a female uses her anger and emotions to then show her true colors. Get even. Get back. Hide sneak cheat and just a plain fool. Just goes to show you how dumb even an attorney can be. I would have used her own profession to get back at her. Would not even talk to the bitch. Too nice and ending

I know I am a late commenter but I couldn't help myself.

First Point: You wrote a marvellous story.

Second Point: I don't like stories with mixed tenses, especially the present tense.

Third Point: Make a short story out of it because after that Friday I would have divorced that bitch in a heartbeat without any regret. Rot her in hell.

Sorry

Frank

Unfortunately

a) You can't seem to use quotation marks properly, which makes following conversations difficult

b) I believe you mixed up a few names. Was Bill the name of both the construction worker AND the attorney?

c) you aren't writing any more. I'll only favorite writers who keep writing.

It would appear that demantoid is a replica of that fucked up wimp shoe-phil idoit whose IQ is basically non-existent. However, both of these two fags mentioned obviously are mentally challenged which may provide a minor consideration as to their lack of intelligence. However, that case can't be made for the jack-off called, "jiminab" - dude you have made a mistake crawling out from underneath the sewage plant you escaped from. Take a suggestion and crawl back silently.

Sometimes I wsih there was a way to give more than 5 stars on some of these stories... and this is certainly one of those!

Please write more stories. Thanks!

This story had me hooked for two hours! One of the best on Literotica.

In my estimation, the best Loving Wives story I have read in Literotica. You MUST write again. Loved it.

write more stories ...

The best story that I have read on here to date.

Certainly the best story on here for years. You must write more!

Susie you make Susie into an evil perverted witch. I didn't rate or comment on the other chapters because it is not good to rate chapters until you know if you like the story. Too often I would give early chapters high ratings only to see the story turn to shit. However, that is not the case with this story so my giving this chapter the highest rating if fully justified because the story is outstanding.

Full 5's. Awesome read. Keep them coming.

this is not literotica, this is great reading. Thank you

for the excitement and enjoyment,that held me spell bound

until the last printed word.

THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK

One of the best - if not THE best story i've read in Literotica. Excellent plot, dense, lots of fast action. Please write more stories of this kind.

whose brain got pickled on jizz overdose

when she heard drinks were on the house she went and got a ladder

when she heard drinks were on the house she went and got a ladder

I agree that it was well writen and it was creative. But after everything that happened to him why be civil. Susie was just another fucked up slut. She put you in the hospital and by her onw admission she would have dumped you on the side of the road and let you die. So, do you press charges and put her away, do you fuck over the company that you gave your life to that was about to fire you. Do you press charges agaist your enemy. Not you just pussy up and move. Your paying a PI thousands of dollar to fuck up his career, when you could spend hudreds to have him fucked up. If is that hard, you win some and you lose some, but in the end it's how you played the game. He was a pussy.

SHE WANTS A TIME OUT AND A DO OVER AND ESPECIALLY FORGIVENESS. TK U MLJ LV NV

For me this story got drug out way to far so much so that it was hard to follow, I simply did not like it.

simple as it is.

he went and got a ladder to get a ladder

Sorry to say it, great story- until the fifth chapter. The first four were almost riveting they were so good. Great pacing, great characters, nice supporting cast (especially like Bud). I just think it was one chapter too much. Great work.

Two parts of the story remind me of the (unemphasized) weaknesses of the OJ defense which contended that the LAPD framed OJ (probably on the spur of the moment while processing a double murder!). The first (and less egregious) Winterfoxx weakness was the Schmidtster getting back to Big D and dragging Susie/Suzie into his set-up that quickly -zero to BJ in three minutes or less (unless he had figured out all her emotional baggage that neither her hubby or former BF had figured out!). The second, and weakest of all IMHO (there were more than two, I'm just going after these two) was the situation with Heidi's brother. Gigantic 'deus ex machina' - everything depends on Heidi leaving abruptly and luckily, her brother relapses at just the right time. Yes, Schmidt might have set up the relapse or just alerted Houston law-enforcement about an existing problem, but this degree of Machiavellian effort is not mentioned. Hell, I'm going to extend my list to include Schmidt's motivation...if he hated Susie that much since law school, he could have, more easily and earlier, arranged for a Black Muslim motorcycle gang to abduct her, impose a week-long gangbang and tattoo party, then parachute her (nude) into the Cotton Bowl at half-time. (apologies to BlMus, just for shock value, not inherent racism/religious intolerance.)

I left off (pregnant and nude, with UofOK facial tattoos). Sorry.

The last part did not live up to the rest. Imagine if the roles had been reversed - a man had tied his wife up, screwed her worst enemy, and then beat her until she almost lost an ovary. Counseling? Talk of reconciliation? He'd be in jail and NO ONE would be discussing anything other than how to give him even more jail time. No counselor would have handled the couple like this one did. What about her assault? She beat and maimed him.

That is what is unbelievable and unfortunate about this otherwise great story.

Here is a woman who joined with his worst enemy to destroy his career and marriage, to physically and emotionally assault him resulting in permanent damage, and to financially ruin him by canceling credit cards, removing funds, and barring him from access to his home.

How could you sit in a car with this woman and talk with her? The idea of being forced into counseling is absurd. If a judge was presented with the scope of her actions they would never insist on counseling. She would be lucky not to be arrested. He could simply say he was concerned about his personal welfare in her presence and that would be the end of it.

Her past is very sad and all but that doesn't excuse her passing on the abuse. She is a dangerous person.

The story is well written but the premise is unbelievable. Unless he actually likes having his balls almost ripped off?

Only one comment noted the final sentence and posed a question - "I respond as I move the gear selector to "Drive" and take my foot off the brake."

It is the perfect juxtaposed ending - a romantic overview and the actual need for digging two graves. Nowhere in the story are two graves dug previously. The marriage only would require one "grave" and there clearly aren't two graves of both their love, regret, etc. No, it is Jake's switch from truth to revenge while Susie comes from revenge to truth.

The issue isn't whether not the reconciliation as good or bad or believable or not believable.The issue is that the wife who was an office of the court.. as a district Atty. against 100% innocent person.

1) a criminal conspiracy to steal money ...

2 Engage in a libelous and slanderous actions

3) Engage in a conspiracy to commit false witness (perjury )

4) physically TORTURE and maim some who is 100% innocent .

While on a personal level in a shocking that this innocent party was her husband that's not really relevant to the point.

When the wife found out that what she had done was wrong ...even if one does accep t the claim she had been misled -she did NOTHING to fix this and as a district Atty she was required to do so.

yet nothing happens to her.

The wife in this story has no redeeming qualitites whatsoever. She is downright evil. One can only question how he can be married to someone who obviously hates him with a vengeance. It was beyond painful to have to read time and again how he tries to persuade her that he is innocent while she puts her finger in her ears and sings 'lalalalalala'. Sorry but that was so out of line it's unspeakable. Even now i cringe thinking about it. Thats like the Jews begging Hitler to not be angry with them because they didn't do anything bad. Like the Indians apologizing to the white men because they settled on their land. It just doesn't make any sense.

So yeah bottom line: Your writing style was good but the ways your characters dealt with each other was completely out of sync. But that problem have many Authors: They make their antagonists so evil that suddenly there really is no way back but instead of going the logical way and letting slip the dogs of war they pussy around trying to somehow get to the ending they envisioned, wether it makes sense or not.

I turn back toward the front of the car and turn the key in the ignition...

"Friends? Susie, 'friends' don't do what we've done to each other.

"Tonight I've learned about your life, your past. I know it was beyond your power, all that happened, all that you saw." I brushed a bit of hair from her face. She looked at me with searching eyes.

I took a deep breath. "But that doesn't change what happened to us, what you did to me." She barely flinched at the memory.

"I know now you are a flawed, broken woman. It wasn't your fault, but that's what it is. I believe you are destined to go through life unloving and unloved. For me, friends? I'm sorry."

Her tears now slid down her face and the sobs were a little louder. "I'm sorry I met you, I'm sorry I know you, and I'm sorry, so sorry, I ever loved you.

"Someday you'll meet someone that will make you feel special again," I respond as I move the gear selector to "Drive" and take my foot off the brake.

"But I don't think so."

I took her back to her car. She was dead three weeks later.

Not reconcile, not friends, not even civil.

The public at large don't get the idea of a story, hey people it's a story! The hero is likeable the villian dispicable and it's wrote in a very readable fashion. I liked it and guess what I'm not a lawyer or a jailhouse attorney. The comments on how the story should go should be left up to the author unless you want to rewrite edit and submit your own take with the author's given approval of course. It wraps up nicely, a little hurried in the end but a good read . Thanks for the series 4**** would have been 5 except the hurried ending

The twist at the end was unexpected, with her suddenly turning out to be a cock hungry slut. I imagine he could forgive her of what she did, but he would have to know that he could never be the man she needs sexually and therefore they could not be together. I would have loved for him to ask her if she thought they could go back to being married knowing that he could not be the bad boy. I think even she would have to admit that. Even though she expresses sorrow and asks for forgiveness, and even for the marriage to be restored, what i dont hear is her telling him she loved him. That is a big ommission. That is the one unresolved question for me. Does she love him? Does she think she can be satisfied by him? However, this story was the most exciting thing I have read on this site. my eyes were constantly wide, breathing excited, and I stayed up all night to finish it. I will be hurting in the morning! But it was worth it. An excellently crafted story with excellent command of words.

Man did this one cause me to rage. Walls were brutalized.

That said, one thing that struck me is people's perceptions of 'good guy' and 'bad guy' and how the wife in this story was actually just looking for a bastard to get off with, but couldn't admit it.

This is a scenario I find extremely frustrating. Every woman I've ever met immediately groups me in the 'good guy' catagory. But that's just a mask I learned to wear early on in life to hide the fact that I'm a psociopath who's never felt guilt in his life and who's actions are primarely governed on risk/reward calculations. By the time the mask starts to fall they've already got the image of 'good guy' and don't seem to be able to see the truth in front of them. Reminds me a good deal of Susie and her continued denial of the truth in this tale.

WHORE, SLUT, CUNT, BITCH, SKANK, CUM DUMP, LOW LIFE, TWAT, HOE, CHEATER, LIAR, .... and on and on and on on ...........

But as others have clearly stated the actions of Susie were unforgivable. I can't believe the amount of anger a fictional character created within me. I've never even remotely felt that much hate towards anyone real!

Read it many times. Shows what an author can do with the cheating wife genre. Really, the cheating was just the jumping off point. It was a mystery, a legal drama, a psychological thriller, and a story of redemtion. It pulled me in and elicited all sorts of emotions. Easy 5 stars.

best story ive read on this story this year.

I know others have posted how this story created an emotional response within them and I find that I have to agree that it does just make you want to smash something, how stupid can one person be? It just goes to prove that we all wear masks and unless we communicate with those we love it is very easy to f**k it all up very quickly.

Great writing, story and ending 5*!

Too long, too boring. She got away too easily.

Some typo's { Brad for Bill} All in all nicely done.

You should continue with your writting, You have great promise, keep it up.

ED

Before I leave the world of comments, And go back to my cave.

As he started the engine, put the shifter into drive, took his foot off the brake,,,,,,

Question,,,,,,,,,

How far was he from the cliff?.

Did he turn left?.

Did he turn right?.

Or did he ?????????.

Only Jake will know if he dug his own GRAVE!.

ED

Despite all the sad comments by Anonymous (sue it is just one sad person) - this is a well constructed and presented story. Thankyou.

Great story just hated that once we saw her frailties and he saw them that his love did not show through. I can not believe that had he loved her, really loved her, that he would not have continued counseling with her and tried to help the woman he loved and himself. I THINK THE STORY ENDED TO SOON. From the background you laid he would not have walked away after that session.

I have now read this series twice, and section 5 three times.

Where is the closure? Where is the conclusion?

Feel like it is has been left hanging...

This is a very very good story. What's next?

This series is one of the best on this site!

The ending sucks. A much more devastating response was in order towards the perp in this story. Forgiveness is the highest form of love. Where was the love in this story? Evidently it was at the end of a penis.

This was one of the best stories on this site and I wish I had never read it. This story has haunted me since the first time I read it because he gets no closure what so ever. I realize the "dig two graves" point was that you never really do, but dammit, I wish I could find someone who wrote an alternate ending that would have him raining fire and pain down on everyone. There is only one other story on this site that filled me with such vitriolic hatred. Damn you.

This was a great story. I'd like to see more of it, but if you don't continue this story line, how about another story? Well written and entertaining.

Best would be an ending where, in the dark of night, an unknown assailant breaks into her home and cuts her throat, leaving the worthless piece of shit to slowly bleed to death while the unknown assailant laughs while drinking a cold beer.

this last part really sucks - who gives a shit about her daddy and all the other crap.

They nearly killed him and they walk away unscathed. Sad. And what the fuck is it with counseling in these stories? It's such a weak device that it's ridiculous.

The Jake character in this story may be The Biggest Wimp in any story on this site. Maybe he can blame it on his damaged nuts.

Anon was right, this was a rather wimpish story

As she leaves the car he drives away. In his rear view mirror he sees her struggle as she is being forced into a nondescript older dirty white van.

He smiles as the van passes him. In the van's window he can see her surprise as he smiles as she looks at him. Tears run down her face.

Yea bitch, see how you like South American whore houses.

To tidy up mom and Hinckley.

Dad really really needs to make mom take a big dose of crow. And Hinckley was as much guilty as Schmidt so are we to take it that she got the same wonderful treatment.

It then turned into a wimpish tale. No real killer instinct by the husband. So, Schmidt gets canned. So what, So she gets fired. So what. Any REAL retribution for what was done to him. NOPE. As I said in the comment title, good up to the last chapter. Last chapter a definite "1."

A sad tale of a woman with physiological childhood problems.

The husband to me was of a wimp.

I was hoping that his wife should have had an assault charge against her.

As for the last chapter she have got decadent with and sucked his cock to completion.

It was the least she could do !

I would have liked them to reconcile and work out their problems.

I think at this stage in her life she would her given her self completely to her husband.

Sorry that Schmidt got off so easily. But this is once again a story of a married couple that forgot the most important tenant of marriage - talk to each other. When you don't the shit hits the fan as it did in this and other stories on Lit. This was a good story. Sorry that Winterfoxx didn't write anymore.

There was no ending. Is that is it that all there is. After reading all this shit I am shocked.

He never accepted the anbuse -

He fought back and proved he was not the cheater -

He divorced her when it all came out -

He went and made a new good life for himself -

He destroyed Schmidt's life -

He got her to admit it all - and not take her back -

How did he wimp out? He did not murder them and spend his life in jisl oh yeah what a wimp - Texas still executes folks BTW.

For all the shit wifey caused she got off way to fucking lightly. After all the shit she put her husband through he should of pressed charges for the assault/sexual assault and nailed both her and the scumbag at the same time instead of spending his own money just to fuck up scumbags life.

So, no logic and no reading comprehension either? You sure you shouldn't be reading cereal boxes instead of actual stories?

Clearly explained in the story why the lead character made his choices, either you skimmed the story or are stupid. Which is it?

... You billed this as a story about adultery and revenge. Well, there was certainly some hardcore adultery but very little revenge, especially concerning Susie. I guess your character, Jake, believed all the psycho-babble about her childhood.

1 star, only because you can't give a 0 star.