All Comments on 'Doodles 01'

So, Doodles is new to me, hah; and seems potentially more interesting than some friends I have previously met. And hah is your new overworked expression ?

Good advancement on the party prep and the continuity of the story. The outfit relegation to someone else is also an interesting aspect. Will look forward to reactions she garners while you become Island Girl. Your Egyptian beauty can be more suitabley developed for, perhaps, something more intimate than a guys card party in the garage. Maybe with some silk drappings and ultra sensuous diaphanous corresponding Egyptian attire to heighten the impact of the Egyptian eyes.

Your writing is getting so much better, congratulations.