by JeanLJacques
Chapter two is submitted and on the way. Thanks for all the support.
This site has stories for everyone somewhere in its annals and I'm sure some people may be accepting of this story.
It would have been better if you had known what you are actually writing.
You need to know the difference between ceased and siezed.
Also "He was shocked to see a blood bad hooked on hung up, hooked to the pit of his elbow" it sounded like something from Rappers Delight. I have absolutely no idea how you could write something like that. Obviously you didn't read the story before you posted it or you would have realised that it was garbage.
5 stars from me. Great imaginative descriptions of how our man felt. So much writing is limp here. Sorry about the other harsh comments. I get them too. You might like my story "He Discovers She’s a Gym Rat" Best wishes!