All Comments on 'Entrapment'

Lets see, next step Lie Detector test and then either counseling, regular Lie Detector tests, and a very punitive post-nuptial agreement for infidelity or divorce.

Kind of saw it coming right at the end, but up till then, it was surprise, so that is a good thing. One thing people likely get on their high horse about is that the wife's bet implies that she was unfaithful to her husband to prove that her friend's husband was also unfaithful. That kind of leaves a pit in my stomach that someone would arrange a test of a mate's fidelity by cheating. That part just doesn't make sense.

I almost didn’t catch that. Good one.

need to continue the story where she gets divorced for cheating.

It's almost the same feeling as a wife coming up and telling her husband that of all his friends, he had the biggest dick. It's a mixture of deep joy and sadness...

Our "hero" has shown that he is a man of principle. Though he'd allowed himself the flirting, the flirting, and the near-fuck… he heard the voice of reason and walked out of the ambush. But he was caught in the trap.

Two divorces in a row, I believe. His wife's "loser" friend and the "winner" where the trophy should have been written: Slut - Traitor - Slut.

It was a short, with an interesting flow, a marked plot, but with an unexpected ending. But it was worth the trip.

The ending made me angry. The author himself should have marked a few more paragraphs to show the attitude of the cuckolded husband. Or maybe some other writer could do it. @FinishTheDamnStory, @saddletramp1956 or @LT56linebacker would produce a "completion" page or two, shall we say, very interesting.

I'm sure the wife would "gain" a lot of attention. But that's just my opinion.

Need to finish it .. chap2

Ouch.

His marriage ends just like that.

Wow so sad. He almost but did not cheat but his wife did. The story can not end there.

Finish the dam story!

So his wife cheated on him with her friends wife?

The story was OK but needs to be finished with him walking out - at least for a while..

Pretty sure he lost too.

well done

If the other woman lost the bet it means Suzy cheated with the other husband - hopefully this loner can get a nice clean divorce and eventually find a wife that will remain faithful to him, unlike Suzy!

"And I appear to have lost too."

Does that mean the wife screwed the other guy?

Very clever and surprising but strangely refreshing, woman who cares and a man who loves his wife. I know some men might say and a guy who's not too bright and a bit unworldly perhaps. But, if something looks too good to be true it usually is..... and was! Good Story, Thank You 5*****

Very clever story. Especially the lasr sentence. I wonder what will happen next.

Idea could've worked, but the execution makes it seem a bit trite. Going to assume his wife bailed after the other husband took the bait, otherwise it makes no sense cheerfully announcing their plan.

Wow, that last line flat out ruined an already bizarre story. What a miserable collection of assholes, but the wives are pure evil.

Wow. So did his wife shut down her friend's husband before they had sex, or did she go all the way?

Hubby will be asking questions.

Does that mean she fucked her friends husband so in fact cheated

Sad Even with the humorous good boy portion

So... she fucked her friends husband. I get it.

They both lost... Ouch!

Oh boy! This has been done before but i love this version. In one way he never should have taken her to his room. But he is hit with the strong possibility that his wife did the same thing to the blondes husband and was successful!

Only flaw is the blond crying. I guess that was bait as why would she cry over the cheating since she herself was to cheat? Losing the bet tears or not being desirable enough tears?

She won, he lost.

The wife that won the bet, did she have sex with the other woman's husband?

Was this to be funny? She won the bet and divorce papers, I presume! 2*

Which means the protagonists wife lost

We’ll written. LOVE the implication.

Hope he divorces her!

Nicely executed twist.

nice wife

she s happy she won the bet ..... but at what cost

the husband should be proud of himself for resisting .... but at what cost

maybe the writer could finish his story or are we going to get a February sucks response

seems more as an introduction than a real story

can t really rate just the start need the whole story

whichever this story ends up good luck to the husband ... he will need it

So Suzie fucked another guy. Looks like she lost too.

Very very intriguing story. Well written but leaves the reader hanging. Begs for a short sequel.

His wife won, her girl friend didn't succeed in getting him into bed. But what does it mean her girlfriend lost? Did she bet she could get the girl friend's husband to a room or did his wife get the other husband into bed. Almost looks like the husband whose wife won actually lost.

Could be taken either way. I have to give you credit. Great story and may even top George Anderson's "February Sucks" for rewrites and interpretations.

Bravo.

If, in fact, she won but her friend lost, doesn’t that mean he lost too?

So does that mean his wife fooled around?

nice twist

His wife infers she won the bet and got "lucky" to boot............. Time to divorce.

Everyone lost

Oh boy!!! Two strikes without trying. How can this end in a good place? I don't see how.

Well, it was nice to finally see a man who was tempted, but held firm. BUT, this 'entrapment' went too far- seems a good way to ruin a marriage.

Whens the divorce?

When will he realise what his wife did?

Sounds like both women lost in the end. good story. The dumb thing is taking ANY woman back to your room and leaving her alone while he showered. Did he never consider she might rob him? Big plot hole in a small story. But you had the ending in mind... still 4 stars.

Ooh! You evil twister you! I see what you did! As much as I dislike the mishandling of our semi-hero, the MC I do have to say well played! NOW! What will be done with his wicked wife? Hmm? 5☆ - TANSTAAFL

Okay time to divorce. Go back to the good female friend and get some pay back.

Does that mean wifey poo fucked the friends husband? If so then out hero lost too.

A little clarification (especially in THIS category is always needed. )

So that means Suzie slept with her friend's husband. How long will it be before Suzie's husband figures this out? One star.

Ok, so here’s my train of thought.

Suzie’s husband remained loyal and didn’t cheat where as the friend’s husband did cheat.

If the friend failed then I’m to assume Suzie tried with the other husband as part of the bet.

He cheated… with Suzie. She won the bet but lost her husband, what a hypocritical idiot.

So, I guess wifey fucked the other husband.

Short and sweet. I liked it.

Good story. 4*

Unclear. If she lost , I and there mire to the story ?

The ending is not conclusive for me. If the wife’s friend tested her husband (who passed…barely) did his wife test her friend’s husband…who didn’t….meaning she was unfaithful?

but she was unfaithful by her own admission

Hang on.. I've just realized what she said....

Nice kicker at the end there.... :D

quick and easy story = Divorce

The only way this could have been telegraphed more clearly would have been if the words "Western Union" were stamped on her forehead.

Doc

Nice! I got it.

So they made a bet between them that neither husband would cheat and Suzie made her husband a cuckold. That's what I got out of this.

Horrible wife. Husbands do this in stories and en up in divorce.

Nope. They both lost. She lost because of her actions. If her friends husband cheated, he cheated with her. No man would put up with that type of behavior. And no husband would accept her actions without divorcing her. So both women are going to end up divorced. One from a cheating husband - one from a cheating wife. And it's a poor story because you never really ended it. Left the best part out - the confrontations.

She won and he lost because she cheated on him.

Just loved it. The irony of the whole thing.

Well, no... She lost too.

The only way she would know the other husband had been unfaithful, was by going through with the charade... she fucked the other husband.

Either hubby is a total idiot and just revels in his near escape... or he dumps her for fucking around on him.

Does anyone think that the wife could have gotten the cheating guy far enough along to say that he was committed, and escape with her fidelity intact?

So if she won. Did she cheat to prove it?

How will he react to her confession?

Lol. No need to finish, we know what happened. The other woman lost because his wife was successful in bedding her husband, and she was not. Now nothing is left but the lawyers.

There's really nothing to like about this story. 1st there is the actions of the husband. A strange woman that appears to be in some kind of distress Suddenly decides that she wants to fuck you. You're not a famous star you're not wealthy you're not extremely good looking. Just as super hot woman decides that well she has to have you.

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That may happen in LIT loving wife's story but in real life that never happens. And this husband is too fucking stupid to realize this.

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And the wife is trying to track the husband for what reason? If if this particular man is a social wet blanket then the odds of him meeting some woman and cheating on his marriage is quite low. Is to raise the issue that the wife is intentionally trying to get dirt on her husband husband to divorce him and use it to get a better settlement.

Run Forrest run

I usually don't comment but this one make me stop and think. Good job.

No, you didn't win . . .

Pretty good twist on the old cheating wife theme. 4 Stars

Decent. Solid 3 *** effort.

Interesting concept. However the ending is not finished. When he works out What she really said and meant by her comment, there should be hell to pay.

5* nice twist! She lost too

If her "good friend" lost, didn't his wife cheat, then?

"The woman you meet last night is a good friend, we had a bet between us that our husbands wouldn't be unfaithful. I won... She lost."

If those are the games being played... bail.

This is far beyond, "trust but verify". It`s time to be leaving wife behind.

"soda seat" I'll assume is a simple typo for "sofa," but wtf is "hand jested?" Is that supposed to be "gestured?"

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"I won... She lost." - Does that mean that Suzie fucked the other woman's husband? If the two set-up were at all close, it means that Suzie was at least naked in front of the other guy.

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Needs editing badly.

So did she attempt to sleep with her wife. He failed, did that mean she had sex with the other’s husband.

I don't know if "She lost" is what he would want to hear!

Normally don’t like the 750 word ones. But you figured out how to tell a lot more with that final line. Good job.

"And I had a similar bet, but I bet you'd eventually be unfaithful. I guess I won. Bye."

Ok - where do they go from here? Inquiring minds want to know. The only fair outcome is he gets to keep them both. As his sex slaves.

Their husbands wouldn't be faithful? The other woman lost? Do you mean that his wife seduced the other woman's husband? What a lovely thing to tell a husband just returned from a work trip.

So basically she just admitted being a whore and cheating on him with her friend's husband while he hung onto his vows...the follow-up is him burning her to the ground, right? RIGHT??

Ha.

The entrapment will make the husband on his toes.

It is never good to cheat the spouse.

Good thing he controlled himself or else I would approve the wife cleaning him out in court.

I see what you did :)

So his wife slept her friends husband? That’s cool!

So she was unfaithful with her friends husband… looks like they all lost. Nice twist! Good story.

So the guy's wife slept with the other womans husband? Hmmm.....

Now he needs to divorce his wife. She cheated.

So his wife had sex with her husband. He should be out the door from her.

Aaaaand, they're done! Someone who loves you does not entrap you. Thus, wifey doesn't love him.

Start the paperwork now, while you'll still get 50% of your shit. And for God's sake, never reproduce with here.

OK I gave you 4 stars for originality, but tell me if I'm understand this story? Two women have a bet on their husband remaining faithful by both women tempting/entraping the others husband, right?

This means that Suzie picks up and tries to fuck her good friend's husband and Suzie's "good friend" picks up and tries to fuck Suzie's husband, right? So Suzie tells her husband, "we had a bet between us that our husbands wouldn't be unfaithful.I won, she lost." So Suzie's husband WAS faithful but the other husband who Suzie tempted wasn't. So that means that Suzie fucked her friends husband! So Suzie won but her husband "Good Boy" lost because his wife fucked her good friend's husband! Man, Suzie is really a dumb ass slut in my book and she just told her faithful husband so!

I think that wife who thinks she won, lost..

Dump the whore.

I see the attempted coyness of the story intent; BUT analyze what she just said to him !!!

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He needs to kick Suzie to the curb for this SETUP. Suzie just fucked away all trust. She is so arrogant she likely didn't realize she also confessed to being a CHEAT (with her friend's husband, how did she know the other husband lost the bet?) Suzie is a willing CHEAT, I hope they have no kids as this beeoooch is toast.

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3*. hooyah, I'm on the verge of 2*

Interesting twist. Has the wife breen unfaithful?