All Comments on 'Exhibition at the Night Club'

This is a story written by one person "I" for just one other person "you".

Thus making it hard to read - since it's like reading someone private letter and not a story.

When writing in first person think about who is your reader ? Its not the person who is "You" in the story but rather a friend that you retell the story for. The reader is never the one in the story.

Try writing in third person for a better story. Writing a story in second person is a big NO and writing in first person is hard.

User ponderinglife, I liked this story, I understood everything. It is very well written, there are no spelling mistakes, all tenses are used correctly and the grammer is perfect. You should re-think your comment, as you have baseless claims.

This was so fucking hot, so detailed - my kind of story ;)

These stories on Literotica get old with woman constantly giving guys a BJ in a night club or bar, anywhere in the stories. That's just not average women's behavior. 90% of women polled, hate or won't give even their husband a blow job. They hate the salty taste and degradation of them.