All Comments on 'Family Values 2222'

"Lilyth and Adam went to the clinic."

"Lilyth, to surprise her husband Adam,..."

"Lilyth and Adam, a married couple,..."

"Adam, Lilyth's husband of 40 years,..."

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Never have I read something that was SO redundant and repetitive, that it makes me think it is just a collection of writing prompts created by an AI.

Well now, THIS is the making of something interesting.

Really couldn't dis certainly the rational for this essay being in the Incest category. Perhaps, had I read further, I might have come to the explanation. Did not complete reading because I found it far to clinical and, with the ages of characters, quite disbelievable.

Dry, sterile, and boring.

Interesting. My first ever attempt at writing. All criticisms are welcome, I feel like a child that has colored a picture of mom and dad and stuck it on the refrigerator. Then being criticized by his parents for being so incompetent.

@manlyspice I know the feel :D

I kinda operate on the assumption that you're NOT a child anymore because, otherwise, you shouldn't be on here. Please just take my criticism as an honest attempt at pointing out the few things that made the story less enjoyable for me, and NOT as an attempt to simply shit-talk your effort.

This is not irredeemable, but there are almost no character interactions or sex scenes ad that's way more interesting than the setting. The world sounds pretty interesting but with such shallow characters I struggle to get invested. Like I would love more descriptions of the lactation sessions online for example