All Comments on 'Fatigue'

Wow, dude. You are a hella good writer. I found this fascinating for a while, just due to the writing. But... too dark for me, bruh. Should you ever write something not so... spicy, I would be happy to read it. Randi.

I never figured out why this couple got married in the first place!

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Another well written story by this author, yet I despised every character and found it painful to read. It was such a mash-up of the willing cuckold lifestyle and the BTB revenge fantasy that it will probably succeed in pissing off both of those fan clubs. If that was the goal, I will have to give credit to the author for their deviousness, if nothing else.

Well written but not a single decent likable character.

Didn't work for me.

Good writing but what an effed up story.

10 stars for WM's Great Writing, Epic Story, and Epic Effort. True? It was a heartbreaking story of kinks getting out of hand. Because that is the way it works with "Kinks" thanks to the Devil. Sin just multiplies sin. It may have been used originally to make their love-making more intense, but like any other drug, it takes more and more to get the same effect. It was unfortunate that the marriage couldn't survive But it had to happen. Breaking everyone's heart. Sad Story, almost a happy ending. But the wife just got too carried away with screwing around and her "power trip" of telling her husband what to do all the time. Great Writing. Thks. Buster2U

Play stupid games, win stupid prizes. They were both idiots but at least he woke up and ended the disgusting bogus marriage. Maybe he can try being a normal person in a normal marriage.

Sick

Nope, dropped it when she decided to feed him another pies. NO cuck crap for me. I skimmed and saw he got some revenge I gave it a 3* but he has some serious problems that need a shrink. Or he will never get his man-card back. Glad they never had kids to F up another generation and killed his gene pool!

Didn’t like the story at all. He was an idiot and she was a bitch.

As Scorpio said, play stupid games win stupid prizes.

Well written story with a couple of despicable people. At least he finally got out of the “relationship.”

No. I'm sorry, but why doesn't he divorce her before the bottom of the first page? She's horrible.

Agree w/ Just Words. The story was over four pages before it ended. She was worse than horrible, completely self-consumed. Should have dumped her quickly or taken the paddle from her and taught her a hard lesson.

I truly have no idea why these half wits acted the way they did. They deserved each other. Not sure what I did to deserve them.

I guess crazy loves company. Play games with the sick bitch and then wonder why she just gets worse. The MC got what he deserved.

Reading the first page was exhausting.

Yeah. Page three and your legal bullshit isn't suspending disbelief.

He told a man he wasn't welcome in his house or bed specifically and the dumb fucker fought him.

Your dumb shit ignorance of actual law and social embarrassment is too much.

The wife and the sub wouldn't be pressing charges for anything or they would be ruined and it would be very dubious for a man trying to bed another man's wife in his own bed and trying to attack the man in his own bedroom to prevail.

Grow a brain you fucking idiot.

This is truly a disgusting, offensive vile impulsive story in every sense. Quite frankly, the main character is so repulsive so mentally disturbed that I was actually cheering for Helen to continue to abuse him because hes so pathetically weak and stupid.

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The first two I have pages of the story is a litany of examples where the wife is changing their sexual relationship, and in every possible instance, the husband says nothing or accepts it or backs down.

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Given the husband's non reaction, why would the wife think she could not do this and get away with it?

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ABOUT THE MALCOLM FIGHT SCENE... The husband figured out early on. That this was a setup by the wife and Malcolm. But if it had gone to trial the husband and his attorney could have had a very strong defense that this was planned by the wife and her deviant outside of the marriage deviency and controlling nature.

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This would have been an easy case to win in front of a jury. There is no reason why the husband had to wait 6 years and accept this threat of legal Jeopardy.

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This author has amazing talent and I become a big fan of all of his work but this story does not make any sense at all. The author attempts to make a psychological argument that the wife need to be hate for power fucked and the husbands willing to do this set them on a path.

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But in the first half of the story the wife's need to constantly change the rules and push boundaries should have generated some kind of reaction from the husband. It was his refusal to act that led to the wife, becoming a dictator and a tyrant

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But where the story really breaks down is the ending. The husband's rationalization as to why he's being kind to his violent tyrannical abuse of emasculating wife makes no sense. Yes, he went along with Weird sexual interplay. ****But she set him up and controlled him for 6 years and engaged in violent sexual interplay that he did not approve of..

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Yeeech

I'm a fan but this Cuck BS went too far.

Not gonna hammer your ratings because it isn't to my tastes, just think you've got talents that are better suited to your previous stories.

Thanks for throwing your hat into the most critical category on the site.

Got bored with his stupidity and from the 3rd page on.

So . . . are we supposed to feel sorry for the spineless cuck?

The whole story can be summed up with something stated part way down page one ‘Because I’m stupid’, that little tidbit made the rest of the story irrelevant. Once stupidity is admitted you know it’s a downward spiral and whether you continue to read relies heavily on how interested and/or interesting the characters are, sadly this couple were pretty unlikeable.

I actually really disliked the husband in this. He's right about himself, definitely a jerk.

I've enjoyed your work up til now but when I got to the end of page one and saw there were still another four to go I had to bale out as I couldn't face that much more.

Seriously, how does the MC in this story even get to use the toilet without being supervised? He is a raving idiot who makes the same mistakes repeatedly with the same results yet doesn't have the basic intellect to change things up, merely relying on the logic that if one type of sex fails to solve a problem then trying a different type will work.

The problem with deviant fantasies is that they can only be made real by deviant or otherwise damaged people. However exciting it may be for a man to imagine being cuckolded, if he has a wife who is enthusiastic about making it happen for real then he has a big problem right there. A truly loving wife would not want to participate in such dangerous and destructive behaviour.

These two cranks deserve each other and at least by being together they are ensuring that they can't damage another two peoples minds.

Usually like your stories but not this one. Should have ended early when she said, "Maybe we should divorce." He never should have let it get that far in the first place, but he was just as big a loser as her. She was despicably selfish and violently narcissistic. He was nothing but a sissy wimp. Everyone in this story was easy to hate so even if it is well written, it was horse shit.

Definitely not for me, too demented. Excellent writing though.

Great writing, but that was one long term retaliation, then not BTB. 3⭐️, just not my type of story…..

THAT was awful. Why waste your talents on such a perverted plot like that?

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2 **

Brilliant story about some truly reprehensible and effed up people. This is good fiction.

Well, it takes all kinds, and this is one of those kinds that I never knew was out there. Couldn't understand any of the feelings going on between these two, but it was a fascinating story.

Congratulations. A vomit inducing story with a mentally retarded moron married to a complete cheating bitch of a wife. The fact he let this go on for, what... about 8-10 years is just mindless.

Moral of the story seems to be don’t marry a vicious narcissist. Unless you’re like Joe, who thoroughly deserves it. Moral to the reader is avoid stories, even from a talented author, that involve ugly people doing ugly things.

Story left me flat. I didn't see why they even spoke with each other let alone stayed in the "relationship". He was a fool ad she was mentally deficient. Waste of 6 chapters and in their case a long period of time. First read ofthei writer. Will try one more.... Maybe.

Well written complete failure. The MC is completely implausible. The entire episode with Malcolm is also ridiculous. No prosecutor would waste resources on a "he said/he said" case like that. The standard is a "reasonable doubt", and a prosecutor knows he'd never get there, especially given Malcolm's size, training, and reason for being there. Any claim that the MC used excessive force would not be convincing, again, because of Malcolm's size and training. The law, and juries, don't require a finely calibrated response in self defense situations, and any discrepancy in the MC's testimony and Malcolm's about the nature of the fight wouldn't get to a finding beyond a reasonable doubt. In addition, as a lawyer, Malcolm would never want the publicity of a trial under the circumstances. There's more, but there's no point in going into detail or dealing with objections to the first point.

A trivial point....you never lead with a kick against an opponent like Malcom, or anyone else with any fighting skills. Kicks take too long to deliver no matter how fast you are because of the distance the kick must travel. In the very close quarters described you would jam Malcolm by moving inside and striking for the throat eyes, etc. (This is self defense, not a sports match).

Finally, when the cops act like they think they are the judge and jury, they need to be sued.

5 stars for pissing me off. That us good writing.

Fatigue was a good title for this mess, because I was fatigued by it by the end of the first page. Skimming the rest of this, between that and the comments, I see it just got worse. From what I saw, you had him take years to realize what should have taken only a few weeks -- months at best.

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You took a story that had maybe one page of plot and vomited five pages out of it. BTW, each Literotica page seems to correlate to about 7.5 in Libreoffice/Word, so somehow you typed -- can't really cal it writing -- about 37.5 pages out of this.

Total waste of time.

Wonderfully crafted story . IMO yes it was long and even bordering on being mundane , however it didn’t get there , it stayed flowing and even brought itself back to a flourishing finish . So , all-in-all , ninety percent of the time it kicked kung -fu ass and the other ten percent , not so much , lol it’s well worth five stars to me !

So this was your first story that was a "misstep" in my book. I don't think that it belonged in the LW section. More a Fetish/BDSM thing. Next, I don't understand why he wouldn't have her arrested the FIRST time she hit him. Talk about an unlikable character (both him and her). Then, why wouldn't he divorce her? And then to give her half after he was awarded 80%? This story just ran off the rails and then crashed down the cliff. Not your best work.

I really like your writing, but I didn't like this subject matter. That didn't cost you stars, however. Fine job!

First time some bitch that's supposed to be mine disrespects me about fucking for other guy?

She the fuck out the door. End of story.

This was a toxic relationship from the word go...and they tried to fix it by making him a cuckold?

How fucking stupid can you get? Dumb premise. Dumb telling of the story. Dumb ending.

Sorry, but that was god awful. The monotonous repetition of the sun husband’s duties, concerns, and frustrations would put the most intrepid individual to sleep. Think the author might have been taking lessons from some of CG’s stories. Had to bail after 3 pages.

The story plot was a great idea, but it was poorly executed. Way, way too long and repetitive!

This is a good story very well told. This author can write, he creates realistic conversation, he adds humor in a mature way, and keeps the story moving without bogging it down in useless or repetitive detail. That said, his main characters in this story are not likeable and exhibit terrible judgment. But that’s OK because this is a story about flawed human beings. I do think he should have written more about how Helen reacted to his finally growing up and getting gone. But overall, a good, fun read.

Well written story, but I couldn't stand the characters. I hope he fixes his life. As for her - I hope Karma run over her with a fully loaded truck - multiple times, then after parking it on her, explodes it!

From the numbers, this tale has been the worst till now (3.2*): pretty much disliked by most of the readers. An obviously awful plot, since all the other tales got a much better readers evaluation (4.3+).

Overall this is a story about a pair of idiots being both mentally ill.

It would have been more exciting if the guy would hang himself and his wife be thrown in front of a truck.

Sorry but this was a laughably stupid story. What sane person would waste that many years with that woman? As others have said this story should be less than 2000 words long.

"Wandering" is right. So is "Fatigue:" what I'm feeling now.

Interesting story... A bit strange final conclusion for me..., strange the judge gave her the minimal... I would have preferred she and her lovers got it much much much worst... I missed more BTB here...

They're both in the wrong lol, it's better than all those other "cucking bad" stories but due to the fact this guy and Helen are more level headed it makes them seem even dumber.

Good story ig? Write better sex tho

Good story Ig, better than those other "cucking bad" stories but due to them bith being more level headed characters they seem dumber, cause the whole world ain't some goofy ahh Shakespeare play it's just a buncha mentally ill mfs dealin with eachother lmao.

Good writing tho, write better sex imo

If this tale was an experiment to see if really the fetish-cuck tales get bad readers feedbacks, then it has been a success. And it's true by many, many months.

From btb to be the cuck in a few short stories. It might be that you're probably doing a fast run as an author. Either way, you are definitively a cuck

Can’t fault the writing, Just hated the swisted story.

Great, realistic, and fun to read. Like everything good on this site, 98% of the readers will only see it as "cuck sh*t" or "not cuck sh*t". Pearls/Swine.

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The phrase "ham glaze" cracked me up. It evokes the memory of the Black Joe Louis & The Honey Bears Song about the Nevada brothel! "Here to get my ham glazed..."

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As a criminal defense attorney, I'd love to have taken MC to trial when he beat Malcolm, especially since Malcolm was a bar member. (Hint: He would've never filed charges). If not, and circumstances dictated a criminal trial, discovery would've been a double-edged sword, including psych evaluations of MC and Helen. Given the right jury makeup (male, divorced, crazy, and/or cheating ex-wife), it only takes 1 to hang a jury. With 3-4 "not guilty" votes, no DA will retry.

A disturbing story told well.

At times it was hard to follow the many twists and turns and the underlying theme was at times disturbing. That said, the story was well written and hard to stop reading.

5*

Load of crap.He is a spineless wimp.a disgrace to the male species.If he intended leaving after the six years were up,why did he not start putting money away for when the divorce came about.Also given the number of cocks Helen had over the years,how come she never got an STD?.

That's one of a handful or less of willing cuck story I have ever read all the way through. Well written and twisty though i sorta saw the set-up before him, I mean looking in is easy to see but making him a lawyer was a nice touch straight 5 on this one

Absolute loser this guy is

Can't say I *liked* it, but you tell a hell of an interesting tale and you tell it well.

Way to long, nothing to see here.

Why did you even write this tripe?

Depressing, and not engaging. Too long for no payoff or learning.

To start with my myriad of criticisms, an initial premise I would never be able to wrap my head around.

I’m never part of the reflexive, idiotic “cuck accusing” crowd, but where the shoe fits, . . . . .”

characters were a little too obvious at times. still an interesting, albeit a little long, tale of prolonged heartbreak.

Strange relationship that I cannot really fathom. And Malcom got his ass beat into the ground (which he liked) and got his sessions later, but never suffered any real retribution for the set up.

I like that the story was will written and not formulaic, not a clone of your other stories. Too many authors write the same story again and again, but yours are each different.

I didn't like anyone in the story, but maybe that was the point. You'll get tons of negative feedback for not having the Navy seals torture all her 'friends' and leaving her destitute and sobbing for her man with regret, but you be you. Nice to see fresh ideas. I wasn't a huge fan of this story but did like your others and appreciate your variety!

Keep writing. Keep growing.

Pretty good story. Keep writing, you have a uniqueness (is that a word?) missing in the LW category. 5 stars

One the one hand it's original, one the other, man are the characters fucked up in the head.

Sad story again. I guess once the bitch began began her deviouis twisted logic it was over. Be a good follow up story to have her suffr the other side.

Weird.

Couldn’t even read through this shit

Well written. I'll rate you on that, but that was seriously fucked up.

Love a great story.

Yikes!!! What an appropriate title. I'm not sure if I have masochistic tendencies or am just plain stupid to finish this story. I was very fatigued by the middle of page 2. In the end, it was tied up nicely but the wife was let off too easily; he should have taken his 80%. An Malcom should have paid for his part in the wife's set-up.

Normally when the paddle comes out I find a new story but when I figured out it was reasonable for the story I continued and was happy I did. Really prefer stories that they actually have love for each other but you chose not to go that path. Still willing to take a paddle for years says something but it’s not fear of the police. Would not have been upset with a little turn about is fair play after Helen learned what prison was all about.

I don’t really know what to make of this. Before the setup, when she mentioned divorce, she admitted going far beyond their initial agreement. He’d already lost her respect and didn’t trust her. She was willing to divorce over the possibility of losing her stud farm. That wasn’t a fed flag, it was Joe having a piano dropped on his head. His contribution to the problem was trying to fix their marriage. Why give her half when he didn’t have to? She didn’t deserve it. He could have spent the money paying other inmates to harass and beat her. She earned that much.

Way too fucked up.

Not for me!

Took too long. When she mentioned "divorce" that should have been it. Power exchange games are one thing, but non-con/emotional blackmail are a different kettle of fish.

Weird. About weird people who lost their way. Didn't really care for it, it qas way too beyond the pale for me. 3*

Well written, but what dreadfully sick people! I hated it.

Yes, the story was excessively long in duration and perceived time spent by the MC.

While I appreciate the authors' contribution, I found the story had died before its ending.

I read all five pages ... but Gawd, I was numb before finishing the first page. I’m sure I would have bailed on the marriage before she even mentioned the word “divorce” early on. But I understand how damaged these two idiots were, and how they couldn’t understand what they were doing to each other and their marriage.

Well, that was different.

Not your best story and not my type of story. I read all of your other stories so I finished this one also. I believe I would have let Malcolm file charges and taken it to court

Not my cup of tea. Had to finally say “enough”. 3*

The story rambled on for too long, it was too repetitious and the basic premise was ridiculous.

"That's when I got kneed in the 'nards."

rofl what nards he dont have any to knee

had to skim it 5 pages of a MC like that is yucky

eh my own fault for not checking the tags and ignoring the score or rating or whatever that star thing is

Hope this not a reflection of your life???

LOVE slap-hapy-papy #9

Seemed to have a lot of repetition, didn’t it.

And I just don’t buy that it took him that long to realize he didn’t love her anymore.

I liked the writing but not the theme. Some people think that all women are selfish and cruel You just accelerated the stereotype to a higher level. The guy is a loser and he made every stupid move to prove it He let her beat him up for gods sake. She didn't suffer at all except she was nuts.

He started the ball rolling and she took it and beat him over the head with it. Neither character is a sympathetic one. They actually should have been sentenced to live together in a all house for the rest of their lives.

Way too long. The wimp is unbelievable, from actkons to motivation. The bitch is crazy and learns little from 8 years of instruction.

And of course the corruption is found everywhere, not just in this story. Wish he'd sued, but that was out character.

Play stupid games, win stupid prizes. It is hard to feel bad for Joe as he started this crap. However once Helen tried to bring Macolm into their house, she ended their marriage. Joe should not have gone through any of those legal issues. Malcolm was a martial arts instructor. Joe was defending himself in his own home against a trained fighter. Malcolm should have been the one to be charged and then pay Joe for damages. Joe was his own worst enemy. Now he needs to find a better woman. A normal woman and have a normal sex life. Maybe start a family although with the many years in the timeline, it seems he is now a little old to start over.

So long and no actual ending...and no point to it. 1 star and that is 1 star too many.