by Plimboy
At least post this garbage in the correct category so no one has to read it.
When "Fetish" is in the title, maybe the story belongs in Fetish?
Yes, the real idiots don't die out. This author and his story prove it!
Dialogue helps the characters tell the story instead of you. Plus, it really is Fetish or possibly BDSM(?) but even that's a stretch.
Gay Make is a different category.