All Comments on 'Finding Mom Pt. 02'

Latent desires often inspired by taboo actions lead to a vicious cognitive dissonance cycle. The true eroticism appears when both begin to participate.

As an author, assuming you call yourself an author, you don't seem to grasp the idea that your readers have one thing in mind - that is to get to read a more complete story entry that is intended to hold their interest. Short pieces of a story are not the way to keep a reader interested, this reader in particular! I will probably read your next submittal but am not likely to continue beyond that.

@grayge37 - Or you could always just wait until it is finished and read all of it at once, but that is totally up to you, my friend.

An extremely wordy offering. Are you working for word count or to offer a readable, enjoyable story?

The length is fine, it is the pace that drags on and on.

How many ways, more, might I demonstrate your style?

Outline your story, identify the characters, build the situation and give the readers that which you have delayed.

I find the sexual awakening of a repressed female interesting. As an avid reader of mother/son incest stories, I find this story unique in its structure. The gradual awakening of the repressed mother and undoubtedly the son may provide an interesting light to this story.

Not much to it waiting on the incest just a 3