by angelic one
You're an amazing writer. Thanks for sharing this story and all your work with me. I too, look forward to chapter 2.
I found your writing to be quite readable and mildly entertaining, but the change from past to present tense, sometimes in the same sentence, was a little distracting.
A good first work. Keep writing, you are young and clearly have many talents which I am sure will develop with time.
Zero Tolerance
baby this was wonderful I can't wait to read more of Yer work thanks so much for letting me see some of Yer work hugs tight
ele
angel, that was by far the best story i've read so far! and i've read a lot! LOL you MUST do the next chapter!
Thank you lil angel for turning on to this work of yours. Very good! See you again !
Robert
that was fabolous i enjoyed every word of it.i hope you write more about these two...