by ynona
... we shall have to read more in order to determine what will develop between Mark and Audra. :) A wonderfully sensuous begining with a very nice build up. Looking forward to the next chapter ...
The arousal builds and builds until the reader can almost feel Audra's warm, wet folds and the urgency of her climax. Now, I feel a REAL urgency to read the second chapter! I hope it comes soon.
I definitely loved this story and can't wait to read the next chapter. That was so hot - omg!
I really enjoyed your story and your writing. Very sexy and descriptive. I especially liked how you didn't reveal (right away) what the note had instructed Audra to do.
I also especially loved how you concentrated on physical descriptions to illustrate how Audra came over and over with intensity, rather than just outright saying it.
I'm looking forward to reading part 2.
Great story i'm looking forward to the next part. Great build up it really got me into the passion of the moment.
Great story. For once, the whole story is based on the woman's pleasure. As a reader, I could feel the nervousness between the two lovers at the beginning and then the connection between them as action begins to heat up. Very good!