All Comments on 'First Meeting Fantasy'

by Brihanna

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mel_pomenemel_pomeneover 12 years ago
A Nice beginning.

This looks as if it could well develop into a fine BDSM story, Brihanna.

Thank you for sharing your talent for describing a scene so well, but I always think dialogue makes or breaks a story of this type, and there simply wasn't enough of it to justify a 5-star score.

Work on that, bring the reader closer in, and you will be onto a real winner.

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