All Comments on 'Foloi Oak Forest'

Nicely composed ,,, thank you for the alliterative passages.

Excellent finish!

Some very odd use of language. I can’t decide whether this adds to the exotic locale or feels like google translate on a bad day.

Good little sexy story. Only suggestion is to build more towards the horror ending. It doesn't have to be a lot, just enough so that it doesn't feel like a tacked on twist. Thanks for sharing your work!