All Comments on 'For Melissa'

Some good writing in the scene. I thought the title a bit weak, with so many entries on this site you really need a catchy title to hook in the reader. One other area that undermined the story was the minimilist description of the environment, making it hard to create the scene in my head. Some more info on Melissa - a little backstory would perhaps also make her a more rounded charachter . Aside from these points a very strong piece of BDSM. I especially liked the opening lines of dialogue. Good ending too.

This was amazing. I loved it. It was the perfect mixture of gentle and harsh. Great beginning, middle, and end! It was a simple scene that was very powerful. It was so wonderful!

with CorpseRider.

The story is perfect as it is. No need for backstory, no need to describe anything other than what's happening to her, what's in her head.

Superb writing. Thank you.

I absolutely loved this! Thank you, Tinef. I can't wait to read more of your writing.

Well written with a lot of passion. I enjoyed the story very much; I was left wanting more. Lawrence

About an otherwise perfectly hot story! Too Dman Short. MORE please.