All Comments on 'For the Life Mother Ch. 02'

it's starting to get better. chapters are too short though. if the first 3 parts are ecah one page long on literotica, then they should be combined into the same chapter from now on. You right well, the story flows nicely. So far longer chapters would be better. If you would like some help with ideas like the above and or editing then message me. though i haven't seen anything so far in your writing that would actually need corecting or editing. having a general future plan for the stories arc will help greatly and also a timeline you can look back on to keep things in order with the timeline. I've seen some authors who get into multiple chacters and forget about mid level characters and have had to go back and bring all the story lines back together. But i think you have the skills to gather fallowers and gain reconigation for your writing.