All Comments on 'Foursomes'

The writing seemed stiff and unnatural. The plot was weak with poor character development. I guess, all in all, it was disappointing. The story could have used a good edit to eliminate duplicate words and phrases.

i stopped reading about half-way through the first page so ignore this if it got better. no description of the characters at all. copy and paste dialogue that felt more like the author telling a joke than a story. all telling, no showing. everything in second person like a history book or a technical manual with bland third person sprinkled in for seasoning. i gave it a two for good grammar.

Big problem with this: it's written mostly in the present tense and with flat characters. Either might be forgiveable, but together ... Ouch!

what a great story .. thanks!

Good story, but not well written