All Comments on 'Friends Take a Plunge Ch. 02'

Just read part 2. Your words flow like lubricant. My only disappointment, and that's because I'm lesbian, is that the interaction between Dany and Laura was all too brief.

Perhaps you'd like to give them a major role in the next part? That's just wishful thinking, you do whatever you need to. It's your story.

I'd also like to hear Sean's thoughts in the cold light of day.

Finally, a spell check wouldn't hurt. Not the machine kind. Get someone to read it for you. AI is still artificial.

5 stars from me for a great first effort.

What a great first story! My score of 5 was for both chapters. Sexy and graphic as hell and very well written. However there were a couple of typos that could have been corrected by a Beta reader.

I liked part one, but part two was riddled with errors: 'site'instead of 'sight', 'peak' instead of 'peek', words with missing letters. Check your work before posting.

The story is good, but it definitely could have used an editor.

Nice! Can't wait for the next part. Sex will never be the same for Laura. Poor Sean, will he redeem himself or become a cuck for good. The lad seems a bit insecure, I'm kind of rooting for him.

Great story. Hope there's a next part.

Good story. Just keep up the great work!