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Delicious!

A few thoughts, after reading the first part, I wondered why you felt the need to respond to all of the critical comments. Your writing is deeply flawed, you continually go back and forth between first and third person, mix up present and past tense and your sentence structure, syntax (word use) and dialog is absolutely atrocious. Your editing sucks, and that’s the good parts. Additionally it would appear you’ve never raised children, as the dialog and permissiveness of both Bens and Jasmines mothers are unbelievable. I wonder if you actually speak English. And finally in defending yourself from readers of the first part, you compared yourself to Stephen King and Agatha Christie?! Are you kidding???

I tell him every time, he gets pissy, I tried to give him tips and criticisms, but he never listened. I’m glad he left fuck you Daniel.