All Comments on 'Her Turn to Take Charge'

Good premise.

Crummy story.

Rushed.

Lacks eroticism.

Needs extensive teasing/edfing of his cock and balls with dialog about how good it feels, and can he imagine what it'll be like when she lets/makes him cum.

Needs involvement of her body. Her breasts. Her ass. Her pussy. Maybe her mouth.

Needs more keeping him on the edge, but not allowing him to cum.

Needs more realistic dialog. Stilted. Forced. Fake.

One star.

I don't know if a girl or a guy wrote this, but it was hot and you nailed it. Nice descriptions throughout.