All Comments on 'Hootie 04'

Quite scattered in various sections which makes it difficult to follow. Then, the story line jumps around to frequently.

Please, take a step back and a big breath. Write a bit, review a bit. Try to keep an even course through your draft and towards your end.

Unfortunately, this piece seems a writer's regression from your recent stories. I have followed you for a while and am confident you can produce higher quality installments. Not only for Hootie . . .