All Comments on 'Hotter than Hot'

You may need to re read and clean up the names. You tend to interchange Paul and Richard often. It is hard to tell who is doing what when both are in the scene.

I have mixed feelings about the brother cuckolding his sister's husband. Neither the brother's wife nor the sister's husband seem to be 100% supportive of the incest, even though they were aroused by the act. 🙄 The flashbacks should have been clearly labeled because it confused me with the Samantha and Martin thing. 😐

This is possibly a good story, but I got fed up with all of the typos and horrible proofreading by the middle of the second page and I totally gave up on trying to fight my way through to the end.

Go back to the drawing board and try again. 2/5

In general, Marian, is the feminine; and Marion, is the masculine form of the same name. John Wayne's birth name was Marion Robert Morrison. Nowadays, that is not as meaningful.

story is too convoluted to be enjoyed. too many characters too quickly and their relations aren't given enough time to set in. the first page is just an explosion of a bunch of different people who are related in some way.

I wasn't even aware that the brother and sister weren't 18 until I read the comments and found that they were both married to other people.