All Comments on 'Hypnosis Cures What Ails Her Pt. 04'

all that work, and one of those 'duct-taped on' sudden endings, almost like a bored exhale at the end of a previous interesting speech.

yep, like so many of these stories that go on too long, writers try to keep them going by adding more bit players, and you end up bored, with a lot of repetitive scenes, and no foundation for them. Totally off the rails at this point. You were right to end it, but it should have eneded with just him and Cassie, none of the useless extras and an extraneous 'other marriage' at the end, too. Yawn.

The two previous negative comments are pretty silly imo, this was a great and pretty realistic ending to a great and pretty realistic story! I really appreciate how throughout the story you really explored the emotional turmoil that this scenario would cause. It was my ideal balance of horny shenanigans to plot, and the plot was not just in service of the horny, nor did it bog the horny down, impressive work! Also the prose was just good all around which is pretty rare on this site in my experience. Thanks for the story!

Continuing my praise bc there were so many things I liked about this story: the use of hypnosis was very restrained, I'm not sure the how hypnosis actually works but in this story it felt very believable and the characters used it only in ways that made sense with their characters. The characters themselves were distinct and believable, Cassie and Ash did feel a little flat in comparison but considering it's porn, they were very well fleshed out. A lot of the stories I read on here I can tell that I would never want to meet their author, the men are alpha chads and the women just barely exist. This was a nice break from that, I could just read it without worrying about silly misogynistic elements taking me out of the story. To directly respond to the points ppl made in the negative comments, I didn't feel like the story went on too long at all, the slow burn nature of the story really made the developments of the relationships feel organic, I didn't feel at any point like I was wading through the sludge of filler, and the side characters didn't feel slapped on to drag the story out, they were introduced early, developed, they organically influenced the plot, and resolved in this story. Just ending it with him and Cassie together would have been disappointing to me because their lives wouldn't have changed much, that ending feels more like a wish fulfillment fantasy to me. The epilogue did feel a little duct taped on to me, but that's because it's an epilogue! They're supposed to be like that! My view of this story is probably a little rose tinted because of the metaphorically chartreuse

poorly written stories I usually see on this site (not an indictment of the site, it's cool anyone can post here), but anyways thanks again for the story!

great story and ending