All Comments on 'I Want You'

This writing is good. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but even though they were having sex, they felt very far away from each other. Like they were doing this on their own, not really together. I understand this is first time trying out sex, both not wanting to get too close, too fast, thinking about other times, about what could happen, a bit selfish, a bit hesitant, just being proud because you could pleasure another woman. Although realistic portrayed, I wouldn't get off on this kind of sex-exploration. I'm a bit surprised they could, maybe it's also because you pictured more the one who was pleasuring the other and her thought proces, than the one who received pleasure.

Oh I Also wanted to say, I liked how you pictured the setting in the nineties, and the girls background and differences. 4 stars from me :)

Thx for the good feedback. Both women in the story are keeping their distance from the other for their own reasons. First time for Lisa, and Nicole is a bit intimidated by Lisa and doesn’t want to get too close to her yet. I have plenty of other stories with femslash where the participants get closer- check out Rendezvous, 2 Cats in Heat, or Closer Than Six Degrees. If you’re interested, of course.

There's too much non-erotica for my tastes, so I'm not giving it a star rating. For those for whom this does work, it looks like it flows. The language sounds natural (a high priority for me in any sort of literature.) Thanks for posting!

Very well written!! I loved it!!!!