Not only does the 'hero' have ED, which nobody really wants to read about, the girl he's with turns out to be a tramp that fucks anyone that walks into a public restroom. Just... no.
Writer and editor of more than a hundred articles, short stories, and books. I love writing, and I write for me. I love to create fictional stories, putting people into circumstances I wish were mine. And I love to edit stories for other writers.