All Comments on 'Imani's Story: Seducing Rylan'

Your prose is very readable, and I liked that you started with action. The sensuality, and some of the imagery, like Rylan's shifting description, shine through.

I feel like you're just scratching the surface as far as character actions and motivation. How can a person innately switch off their emotions? Sounds like there's a story behind that. Why is an assassin so caught off guard by a target trying to bargain for her life? You don't have to tell the whole story in the first part, but a sentence or two of hinting will help reassure me.

Keep writing!

Excellent beginning. Adding both intrigue and sexy worked very well. I cannot wait to read more.

J.D.