All Comments on 'Immortal Love Pt. 02'

This is an admirable effort in what I believe mat not be your original language. There are minor noticeable characteristics in your writing. Example include n or N for what I think may be 'and.'

Your references to your p, or actually penis, included both female and male; I may be wrong but do believe that a penis can only be male.

With additional grammar tutorials your writing will become much more readable. Which brings me to a favorite suggestion: Read your work aloud, and have othat's read it aloud to you. These exercises will assist your identification of minor gaffs.

Please, keep writing. Your work shows great promise.

T

Thank you for appreciation and suggestions. :)

You are a very sharp observant.

Yes I admit, English is not my mother tongue, but will try to improve for sure. I like to use some short forms like, N for 'and', P means 'Penis' , Bs 'breasts'.

What is your suggestion, people will like to read the short forms or I should not use them frequently ?

N yup I like writing, already working on part 3.:)

A good indian story ❤️

Thank you