All Comments on 'Instant Obedience Ch. 01'

Interesting premise.

But a tough read.

Often it's hard to tell whos talking.

Too much 'technical/theoretical' and not enough sex.

Needed MUCH more edging with him being ade hard and then kept hard but not allowed to cum.

Perhaps even some bondage.

Needed him forced to give her multiple orgasms with his hands/fingers/mouth/tongue.

Three stars.

Five stars, this was amazing and I really hope you have more planned. Emily has as much of a hold on me as she does Brian, I think.

Great premise, keep going...

Very sexy, I especially liked the forced public orgasm and the hyper sensitivity! Looks like this is your first story and it’s great, there might be some technical stuff you could work on but just keep writing and you’ll keep getting better. You have the hardest thing (lol) to grow, the raw creativity and vision!

Very nice. I liked how she uses her sexuality to convince him. Looking forward to next part !

I really like her using her sexuality to tease him. Please continue

Nightmare scenario, I see murder/suicide on the horizon.

Next she needs a chip.