All Comments on 'It shouldn't have Happened'

. . . this was little more than a vini, vidi, fucki story.

Wouldn't everyone love to have a father like this? This isn't a story at all...Just a mini portrayal of two persons who don't know what remorse is...Serial killers are people like these two...1*

That's a very entertaining story. Good dialog, slow moving plot, with just enough character development. The ending leaves an opening for a lot of pain😣. If there is a chapter 2.

Looking forward to your next new story or continuation of this story. Thanks very much.

AMerryman

You got me on that. There is only pain and heartbreak in the future. I hope the old man finds himself very lonely in his retirement when his son refuses to ever speak to him again. He won't be allowed to see the grandchildren that Bill's second wife gives him.

Just to remind the guys moaning about it being sick...it's a fantasy...well written with a very funny punchline!

inheritance to stay married to the whore and I'd never claim you as my dad either. But I would out you to the entire community by paying for a billboard announcing your affair with my ex-wife.

This site is called Literotica. It is a site for fictional stories with adult themes.

It's not a factual site, so why do people get upset and carp on about how horrible it is to read such fictional material?

For those of us who like this kind of fictional material, there is Literotica.

For those who do not like it, I think you will find the Disney Channel over there >>>>>>

Thanks, I look forward to more.

As for Mattblack's question, it has been fully and comprehensively answered thousands of times in the last three thousand years. 'It's fiction!' is an absurd response to reader involvement.

Also, he let himself down badly with the childish Disney remark.

I went to your Bio before I read your story, saw you were from the UK and thought Oh no another cuck story. Reading wise some of the normal words were done in US English so I was shocked (miles instead of kilometers). Through the first half of the story I was thinking the person was another female until you reviled the cock. It was then I assumed (bad word) that it would be the father-in-law. You said he was in his sixties and mentioned WW2, so I was figuring a story from the 50's or 60's but you said face time, ipod and blue pill so it had to be more resent. Now we get to my only problem, you never said anything about protection. Assuming (bad word) he was sixty and had his son when he was late twenties or early thirties his son would be only in his thirties as his wife. No mention of grand-kids already so in chapter two will we be seeing his son raising his half brother/uncle?

Don't you just hate those rotten Yanks with to much time on their hands to analyze your stories?

It doesn't seem to be going that well. You are a very good at writing, so I want to encourage you to keep writing and posting in LW. The problem with this story, in my opinion, therefore free of charge, is that it didn't go anywhere. You didn't invest enough into the seduction or sex to make it a hot read, and there wasn't enough exploration of the family dynamic to make it a serious look at that. The punch line was shocking, yes, but shock value is a low premium in a place like Literotica. A little more effort, please. Until next time, Randi.

I thought it was fun and funny.

It’s not meant to reflect the real world and real repercussions.

Lighten up, Francis!

And I’m not sure you should take any criticism seriously from people who can’t figure out when to use ‘to’ and ‘too’.

the Anonymous committer who so boldly pointed out my miss use of the all famous to and too. Criticism is such a harsh word, though appropriate but then that is what all comments are. To you Mr. or Mrs. Anon I thank you for pointing out my terrible use of the written word, if only every thing was voice recorded. I would like to say I will try harder but once you pass 60 you just don't give a shit anymore. WirdSmiff thank you for giving me the opportunity to vent. To all of the Anonymous commenters, come out of the closet and use a name that way one dose not have to point fingers at everyone in response. Did I get the to's right this time?

It’s a shame there are those who allow their own insecurities to blur the lines between fantasy and reality and find it necessary to make rude comments on a porn site. I am beginning to see what others are saying about “the LW troll”

Nice twist. Answers the question as to why the husband was not suspicious. Good story though.

Fuk the critics Wirdsmiff! Write on. 5*

I fucked his dad for a year while he was deployed. We all agreed it was a good way to keep me satisfied, safe, healthy, and not pregnant. We had seen too many marriages break-up due to wives being unfaithful when husbands were away. I loved my FIL and he was a handsome, virile man. It worked out beautifully, and it ended when my husband returned home. It was a win, win, win situation. Good story, BTW!

Lol @ HDK

What a pretentious self-serving twit. Do you a prize for kissIng br’s arse?

My sincere apologies to WirdSmiff, I suspect a gremlin on my browser, and accused the Author of having deleted comments on the feedback, which proved to be unfounded. Pheromones and all that surely played a roll, after all, some of us are not perfect.

WirdSmith, carry on, you have talent, and apologies again on demeaning your integrity.

Any idiot who gets upset over a fictional story on a porn site is even lower than that supposed trailer trash. Do you even realize how fucking stupid you sound?

Get a sense of humor, guy. That HDK comment was funny as hell! You have a couple of typos. I think you missed a word, and you misspelled "ass." Keep looking4it, and someday you might see a real live female ass. Looking forward to Saturday.

Decent story, but is fucking the daughter in law really worse than fucking a friend's wife? Either one is pretty low.

A well written story with a unexpected twist.

Both his wife and his father betrayed him.

I hope he has at least one loyal friend.

I've experienced family betrayal, not in a sexual sense, but in an emotional and financial sense. We only get one family, so I've chosen not to close any doors.

But if a family member, especially my father, betrayed me like this, I, like the Gladiator, would have my vengeance.

I have never figured out why a father in law and/or son's wife would screw each other but I know it has happened in one or more of friends and relatives...

Some people think this is a light, humerous story with a nice twist. Some people think this betrayal is fine, and makes a good story. Some think it is unforgivable behavior on the part of the wife and father. I am with the unforgivable crowd. "But it's fiction!" is the cry from those who like it. That's what I will say when Bill finds out and burns his wife and father alive. It's just fiction, a sweet fantasy story. No worries losers, this author won't write that story.

Some people are more disturbed then other people.

I loved it, wasn't sure where it was headed. Killer ending. 5 stars

Wow... at least they're not screwing total strangers! LULZ!

I would love to see a part 2 where Bill goes postal on his old man......Like fire and brimstone postal....

Patricide is such an interesting crime...

There are assholes and there are men who are the worst on earth. But the ugliest are relatives who assault the women of their own family. And a father who fucks his son's wife should contract HIV or terminal cancer!

I really believe part two will house the killer ending...

You praise the cheaters and revel in the double Betrayal. Just sad and sick.