All Comments on 'Ivy Black'

Rookie mistake, shoulda been in sci-fi.

Decent story, good details in the nonsexual parts. Blocking/positioning was awkward in the sex scene but I could still pick up on the characters' emotions.

Unless there was some kind of time travel/ alternate dimension sci Fi thing going on that I didn't pick up on, there's no reason to switch tenses when you

*Continuation of my comment*

No need to switch verb tense when you switch characters.