All Comments on 'Jackie's New Job Ch. 03'

Excellent writing.

As always in your writing it is the images of your words that make it seem like I’m their watching Jackie half exposed in her outfits. I can feel everyone craning their necks and adjusting in their seats to get a better view of Jackie. Her shyness fighting with her excitement is a total turn on. She is still bouncing back and forth between the girl next door and the new wanton women she has discovered. She sure has taken the bull by the horns when her lust must be fulfilled. You have made her character someone so likable.

Thank you for your story.

Please keep writing.

Peggytwitty

I love the way you describe her inner battle to resist what David wants, while on the other hand she wants to give into him and her own nature.

i think you were writting this chapter a in a fever of your own, the typos indicate you were thinking of something besides grammar, but then I didn't cum here to learn spelling and grammar.

I love reading your stories. They always get me very excited and start me thinking about my next experience. I may use some things I have read in your stories for a future adventure.

Nikki

...gotten me so damn wet. I can visualize myself going through Jackie's torments and feeling her needs. Nice "climax" to the chapter. Keep writing - I cannot say that this story is every woman's fantasy, but it is quickly becoming mine.

Barb

SO GREAT !

Your story has some effects on me, it's like I'm her when I read it !

You should add some more details lol.

Please write more soon, it was a pleasure to read those 3 chapters !

this is the best set of stories that i have read in a really long time PLEASE write more

This story is making me so very hot...I cannot wait to read more of it!!!

Yep, Wow squared. From actually shedding tears reading the hospital scene (it's late, I know patients, and I weep easily anyway) to needing to masturbate to the first sex that Jackie and David had, I'd say you pushed several of my buttons. :) I am all sorts of excited for more scenes with David, and reeeeeeally waiting for Mel to enter sex scenarios. Yay! So happy to have a new Lit. fav!!! Mas, por favor! [Still a couple of grammar/punctuation issues - have you worked with a Lit. editor? You write soooooo strongly that the occasional error is a bit jarring :( ]

Keep the chapters coming! (and me, too) Jackie has so much more to explore, and I want to do it with her.

Don't stop there, this could be the making of a very good series,

This one of the hottest series I so horny right now...

loved it!!

really fun story, enjoying it and this isn't just about your writing, but what is it about shuttering/shuddering and literotica stories? People shudder with emotion, windows have shutters that close, a house is shuttered. It's obviously such a common mistake that heaps of writers copy it.

Besides that small thing, thanks for the fun!

What shuttering meant. Other than that this is another great part to the story.

Thank you for a most enjoyable read. IMHO an excellent job of writing.

thanks made these tale longer please

Every whore wants to know she is a goddess to her man. I almost came.

We need more chapters.