All Comments on 'Jax Home Alone 01'

by PinkPurple

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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Great story here, situations press for time and the imagination provides.

There were very few dropped words until late in the text; maybe the last third were written when a bit tired? Or at a secondary time?

Certainly represents progress in your compositions.

A nicely developed four - 4 - stars.

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