All Comments on 'Joan and Friends'

An interesting first story. I like the way that you build the pace gradually to the climax (no pun intended) and then leave it open for a second part. What will happen when he goes back to finish the work at the house, if he ever does, I wonder? Thank you for posting it.

Oh look another story about a skank wife and arsehole cucking a husband. How original.

"To be continued..."...why? 1*

VERY promising for a 1st story, Word perfect and no-nonsense descriptive. A bit terse, but that was your intention.Keep up the good work.

Don't bother with a continuance.

Don't bother. Seriously, you clearly don't have the knack for this. Give up and go back to fapping, or whatever.

Good start

Not bad, but it needs editing for grammar and run on sentences...

In the first few paragraphs there were too many writing errors to continue to read.

Nice story. Entertaining. Looking for part 2.

Ed

First story!

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