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by Willpkirk

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AnonymousAnonymous8 months ago

Lovely day at the office.

AnonymousAnonymous8 months ago

Learn about tense. Third person vs second person. It's distracting to read first that he kissed (third person), then that he bites (second person). Pick a tense, and be consistent.

WillpkirkWillpkirk8 months agoAuthor

Thanks, I'll def have to keep it more in mind when writing and editing. Always appreciate feedback.

And it is one of a few fun days at the office that I have...seems to be a popular setting for me

AnonymousAnonymous8 months ago

She will have new duties at his wim!

TeemuphillipsTeemuphillips8 months ago

Anonymous should also learn about tense. Person has nothing to do with tense. You switched between past and present tense. Yes, very annoying.

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Hi, I'm Will. I'm a old man, well...I'm 40 but feel old. I enjoy writing erotica, Porn, I don't get to experience very much, so I live vicariously via my stories. I don't really have a "kink" so one story might be a BDSM extravaganza, the next might well be vanilla boy and ...